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   i think i have forgotten how to dream

   for the last time it happened

   i smiled and ran my palms through your hair

   sifting out sand and fumbling at the 

   buried shards of sea glass

   that bite at my calloused fingers.

   your frothy eyes threaten to drown me

   but instead i inhale dopamine and

   carefully trace the thin boardwalks

   that wrap around your skull

   where the hair is missing.

   you ask me if i cried

   and i said that i 

   didn’t think i knew 

   how to



   once when i was young

   i saw a baby cardinal

   huddled and bleeding in the grass.

   i watched the ants and the flies skim over the contours

   of its closed eyelids

   until i scooped it up and held it to my chest

   and cradled it back, and forth


   once my mother walked outside and scolded me


   and she told me not to

   touch

   dead things.  

  

   



This is a true story of a good friend of mine that tripped and fell and died yesterday morning. It was a sad day at church, and so I wanted to write something. At first I didn't want to upload this, but I decided on it because I like how it sounds.
(It's not romantic.)
Number 1 is a true story. 
Number 2 is half true. 


EDIT:: Wow, a DD! This is crazy! Thank you so much to ^NicBelroque for the kind words and suggestions, and for featuring me at all. Thanks again.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-09-16
The vague signs of death in for riley by ~TheOneWhoLovesToEat become clear in the poem's second stanza with a resounding parting sentiment. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
:iconmehreenfreed:
MehreenFreed Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a resonating piece. Beautiful. Sad. Haunting. Very well written.

Congratulations on the DD!

When I read it the first time, it was like being read to be; there is a flow to the words, there is a story told eloquently.

And importantly, I am sorry for your loss.
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Student
Thank you for your feedback, I really appreciate it, and thanks again :)
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:iconyumitherabbit:
Yumitherabbit Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Congrats on the DD. Very touching poem.
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Student
Ah thankshu, Jean ^w^
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:iconfe0:
Fe0 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013   General Artist
For me? Ha Ha!
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:iconmatarahi:
MataRahi Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
This is beautiful... I'm so sorry for your loss
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student
Thank you :)
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:iconhyperanimegirl4lyfe:
hyperanimegirl4lyfe Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
aw man. my deepest sympathies to you and the family :c this is a great tribute. stay strong and God Bless :)
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student
Thank you very much C:
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:iconhyperanimegirl4lyfe:
hyperanimegirl4lyfe Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student
no prob! ^^ *megahugz*
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:iconxtechnologiic:
xTechnologiic Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Fantastic work! I'm really sorry for your loss, and it was incredibly sweet of you to write something for them- especially something this beautiful. Amazing job <3 Again, I'm sorry for your loss :c
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student
Thanks very much <3
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:iconsoconfrontational:
SoConfrontational Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student
thank you :)
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:iconkashirarosea:
kashirarosea Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I'm very sorry for your loss. I'll pray for you.
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Thanks! I appreciate it :)
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:iconkashirarosea:
kashirarosea Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Anything for a person in need!!!!1
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:iconpreston-kei:
Preston-Kei Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm very sorry for your loss... I'm not sure how close he was to you, but I can tell he was a very good friend. 
I wish I could say more, but what else could a random stranger like me say. All I have to say really is, remember him and he's never truly gone. Cheesy, I know, but true. Good luck. ^_^
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Haha thanks! That means a lot. 
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:iconpreston-kei:
Preston-Kei Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem. ( ´ ▽ ` )ノ
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:iconrrysonn:
RRysonn Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
I hope with all my heart that someday, just someday, i'll be able to write something beautiful. Something like this.
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Wow, you don't know how much that means to me! Thank you so much. I'm sure you'll be a fantastic writer.
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:iconrrysonn:
RRysonn Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student Writer
Mmhm~ Thanks!
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:iconallana-san:
Allana-san Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
... I'm terrible with comfort words, but I belive a hug helps a lot... (>'-')>
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Haha thanks, I already feel better ^w^
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:iconvaliantshadow:
ValiantShadow Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm sorry to hear about the loss of your friend, but this makes a wonderful tribute to them.
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Thanks <3
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:iconookamicasha:
OokamiCasha Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student General Artist
In a sense, very beautiful.
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Thank you c:
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:iconhiland-rose:
Hiland-Rose Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Professional Artisan Crafter

My condolences for the loss of your friend.  Congratulations for the DD on this heartfelt piece...

Blessings.

 

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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Thanks, I appreciate it c: 
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:iconsparklefairymangofsh:
SparkleFairyMangoFsh Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student General Artist
aw  D:
many many hugs!!
this is a beautiful poem
feel better dear :3
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Thanks very much! <3
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:iconbronzian:
bronzian Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How did they trip? :(
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Ah, it was a skateboarding accident last month...
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:iconbronzian:
bronzian Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:( I'm sorry
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Its okay c:
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:iconbronzian:
bronzian Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:(
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:iconpopkool:
popkool Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
*hugs*
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Aw thanks dear XD
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:iconpopkool:
popkool Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Uh-Uh
Don't tell me. We're about to go over a huge waterfall.
Yep.
Sharp rocks at the bottom?
Most likely.
Bring it on.
WHOOOOHOOOHOOOOOOOOO
NNNPPPPPPPPPP
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Haha oh my gosh what is that supposed to mean
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:iconpopkool:
popkool Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
WHEEEEEEEEEEEEE
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Student
Thanks so much!
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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:iconnaszoo:
naszoo Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:hug: Hug it out bro... message me if you wanna talk ^_^ <3 Loves ya 
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Student
*awkward squirm* yeah, yeah... *pat pat*. XD :iconbrohugplz:
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:iconnaszoo:
naszoo Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconoldschoolownedplz: U knows it... 

Fcbk? 
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:icontheonewholovestoeat:
TheOneWhoLovesToEat Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Student
FINE! FINE, ILL TALK TO YOU, YOU SORRY PIECE OF...
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